Evolution of my paper

My paper didnt really change too much from my first draft to my third. The idea stayed the same but I decided to elaborate more on a more specific point of view in my last draft. I wanted to make it more of a personal experience than I had it as in my other drafts.  I noticed that some people chose to go a bit more formal and some went a bit more casual than I did. Some only did two drafts and some did three. I really think that doing three drafts helped a lot. Because in my first draft was one side of how I felt, and in my second draft was a completely opposite side. After the conference, I realized exactly how I should bring them both together into one final draft. I am pretty pleased with how it turned out. I was a bit nervous about my overall organization of the essay because of the fact that I merged two ideas together in the end, but from what my peers told me about the final product, it came out pretty decent. I think if  I worked a little bit longer on my first draft, the final copy may have been a little more detailed than it is now. If I decide to edit this one again, which I probably will, my goal will be to add a lot more details. And add even more personal feelings about the topic. I expressed how I felt but I think I could have added a little bit more emotion into it, because it is a topic I care and am passionate about.

5,000 New Best Friends

In “Meet My 5,000 New Best Pals” by Janet Kornblum, a lot of very important points are made about the reality of virtual identities online. She discusses how kids online are going to extreme lengths to feel better about themselves. She said how a young girl was adding people that she had never even spoken with just because she wanted more “friends.” She would add them and then talk to them maybe once or twice and then never speak with them again. When you do something like that, it just opens up the door to people watching over your life. Once you add someone they have access to all of your information on your page, whether you talk ot them or not after you add them.

In the second reading; “When a Risqué Online Persona Undermines a chance for a Job” by Alan Finder, there are some things brought up about your future.  It states how the pictures/posts that ou put on the internet now are no longer your own property and anyone can do anything with them. Even if you have your settings on “private”, people can still find a way to find you.  Any person with any type of authority can get in touch with website administrators and gain access to your webpage. So you should always be careful  with what you put on the web.

I think that in my essay, I already incorporated these points into it because they are some of the main things I feel about virtual identities. I expressed in my essay that any one at any time can access your information once you put it on the internet so you need to be careful. And I also stated how people judge you based on the pictures that you post. You pretty much always have to watch your back with the internet…

Virtual Reality..

So, I couldn’t find a quote that exemplified exactly what I feel about the whole “virtual reality” thing.  I think there are pros and cons to it all. I feel that theres more cons, but that’s just me. I think its great that we have found ways to connect the whole world electronically, but people definitely abuse the privileges of it.  There are so many creepy people in the world that just use the whole way of creating a new identity for yourself to lure on innocent people who don’t know any better.  We discussed in class, how there are old men who will put up a fake picture of themself on Facebook, just so that they can talk to young girls/boys and try to arrange to meet with them.  I think there are many good aspects to it as well though. Like the fact that you can catch up with people that you haven’t been able to speak with in years, in a couple of mouse clicks you could be reconnected. Thats really good, but the whole “little kids getting preyed on” is not. Personally, I use facebook like almost every other teenager, and I love it. But at the same time I can see how social networking sites like that are very dangerous. They have potential to do a great deal of bad things for the world, and they already have.

partner profile

LaAsia introduced me as some sort of amazing swimmer, which is actually very far off from how I really am!  The truth of it is that I am actually a terrible swimmer, even though I am a lifeguard. I play volleyball on the team here at St. Rose. I have been playing since I was in second grade and it is a very big part of my life.  Even though I am in the exploratory program here, I have some sort of an idea as to what I want to do with my life. I would like to be a social worker/psychologist and specialize in addiction therapy and counseling.

She was right however about the fact that I hate cold weather with a passion! I love to be in the south on vacations and would really like to live down there after I finish college. Something about the weather there just puts me in a better mood. I was born in upstate New York, about a half hour from Albany. My hometown is called Burnt Hills. Its a very small town where everyone knows everyone. 

I have two older brothers who I think of as some of my best friends. My brother, Jaret is twenty and a sophomore in college and also plays basketball. My other brother, Chris just turned twenty six. My family is who motivates me to be the best person I can be in life. My parents constantly push me to work harder in order for me to reach my goals. A lot of the things that I do, are for them.